Stolen Remedy

[silverfreak07]

hey, guys! This is a song of mine..it's actually for my band..it started being a poem..well here it is.. hope you'll like it!

Stolen Remedy

My eyes are disgusted
with the thoughts of brightness
In the depths of intricacy
I drown, and can't find the remedy
I can't find the remedy

I want to be the rain
for every dirt
I want to be the smile
after every tear
I want to be the cure
for every ill

Bliss seems a lightyear away
I sail fast to go astray
I daydream of lynch
I want to feel the rinse

Wistful and quite untamed,
I couldn't find myself
Certain facts clutter my mind
It makes me dire blind

I want to be the rain
for every dirt
I want to be the smile
after every tear
I want to be the cure
for every ill

My soul is unswept,
taken away from sanity
I turned cynical
and withered from beam

I want to be the rain
for every dirt
I want to be the smile
after every tear
I want to be the cure
for every ill

My eyes are disgusted
with the thoughts of brightness


-Issa Andes

[Juzz Lloyd]

Hey, I really like that :-) Good work, I've read a few of your poems and they're awesome, talk to you soon!

[silverfreak07]

thanks!!! i didn't know you still remember my poems..but thanks for doing so! catch ya later!

[Alayna]

That's really good Issa! Wow... you and Juzz write such great poems/songs... very LONG. Mine are normally about half that long... Anyways, I loved it.

[silverfreak07]

aww...thanks, Alayna! : ) well, to make that poem short, you can just take off the "I want to be the rain" part. : ) It could be read only once, only that I wrote the whole song. : ) thanks!!!

[Alayna]

I would never shorten it. Its beautiful darling. I just think its amazing how people can write so much and make it sound great. Mine are mostly... 3 or so stanzas long? And they aren't all that great.

Are you guys like, aiming to make it big on music? If so, Very cool man. I wish you all luck.

My point is, you guys write wonderfully. No more to say.

(:

[silverfreak07]

awww....thanks!! well, you haven't read most of my poem/songs yet.. : ) and they don't sound that good. : ) but hell, i'm aiming it big on music with my band.. : ) hopefully we'll get farther than we wish we would.. : )